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The graph below gives information about the price of bananas in four countries between 1994 and 2004. Write a report for a university, lecturer describing the information shown below. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below gives information about the price of bananas in four countries between 1994 and 2004. Write a report for a university, lecturer describing the information shown below. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The graph illustrates the
prices
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 of
bananas
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 in four different countries
such
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 as
Japan
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,
France
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, Germany and the USA within the duration of 1994 and 2004.
To begin
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 with, the
prices
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 of
bananas
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 in
Japan
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 were at their peak throughout the time with a lot of fluctuations. At the starting point,
prices
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 in
Japan
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 were around 2
USD
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. The highest price of
bananas
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 in
Japan
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were
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 nearly 3
USD
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 in 1995 and the lowest
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prices
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price
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were
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was
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 in 2001 which was 1.70
USD
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.
Furthermore
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, the other three countries have comparatively lower
prices
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. The USA has the least fluctuation in
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prices
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the prices
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 of
bananas
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.
Prices
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 rose in the USA from 1994 till 1998 and
then
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, the
prices
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 were constant.
In addition
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, Germany and
France
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 have
the
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apply
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moderate
prices
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 which fluctuated between 1.20
USD
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 and 1.70
USD
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. But in 2001, the
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prices
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price
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 of
bananas
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 in
France
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 overtook the
prices
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 of
bananas
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 in
Japan
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 and
at
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in
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 that year,
bananas
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 were
most
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the most
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 expensive in
France
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such
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apply
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as
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at
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 1.80
USD
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.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "such".
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words prices, bananas, japan, france, usd with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "fluctuations" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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