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The graph below gives information about the price of bananas in four countries between 1994 and 2004. Write a report for a university, lecturer describing the information shown below. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below gives information about the price of bananas in four countries between 1994 and 2004. Write a report for a university, lecturer describing the information shown below. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The graph illustrates the
prices
 of
bananas
 in four different countries
such
 as
Japan
,
France
, Germany and the USA within the duration of 1994 and 2004.
To begin
 with, the
prices
 of
bananas
 in
Japan
 were at their peak throughout the time with a lot of fluctuations. At the starting point,
prices
 in
Japan
 were around 2
USD
. The highest price of
bananas
 in
Japan
were
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was
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 nearly 3
USD
 in 1995 and the lowest
prices
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price
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were
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was
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 in 2001 which was 1.70
USD
.
Furthermore
, the other three countries have comparatively lower
prices
. The USA has the least fluctuation in
prices
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the prices
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 of
bananas
.
Prices
 rose in the USA from 1994 till 1998 and
then
, the
prices
 were constant.
In addition
, Germany and
France
 have
the
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apply
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moderate
prices
 which fluctuated between 1.20
USD
 and 1.70
USD
. But in 2001, the
prices
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price
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 of
bananas
 in
France
 overtook the
prices
 of
bananas
 in
Japan
 and
at
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in
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 that year,
bananas
 were
most
Correct article usage
the most
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 expensive in
France
such
Correct quantifier usage
apply
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as
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at
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 1.80
USD
.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "such".
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words prices, bananas, japan, france, usd with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "fluctuations" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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