The pie charts below give data on the spending and consumption of resources by countries of the world and how the population is distributed.
The
given
pie chart provides information on expenditure and Verb problem
apply
resources
consumption in specific areas Change the noun form
resource
in
the world, Including population distribution. Units Change preposition
of
was
represented by percentage.
Change the verb form
were
Overall
, the USA and Europe were become
the dominant Change to the active voice
became
have become
country
that used resources even though most of the Fix the agreement mistake
countries
world
population Change noun form
world's
was
lived in Asia. Unnecessary verb
apply
However
, food dominantly contributed to global spending while
a huge amount of proportion is from others category
(the unspecified group).
In terms of resource consumption, the USA and Europe stood at 60% proportion Fix the agreement mistake
other categories
while
other area
remained less, just 40%. Fix the agreement mistake
areas
Conversely
, 57% population is in Asia, followed by Europe and America that
had 14% Correct pronoun usage
which
while
Africa just 10%.
In addition
, world spending was varied, starting from food that was
contributed the most at 24% Unnecessary verb
apply
while
transport and housing were 18% and 12%, respectively. Furthermore
, this
was an
evident that 40% of Change the article
apply
other
proportion was unspecified category which Correct article usage
the other
making
Wrong verb form
made
this
number was become
the highest among Verb problem
apply
others
categories.Correct quantifier usage
other
Submitted by misstiasclassroom on
Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
▼
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "give" in your introduction.
▼
Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 3 times.
▼