The chart below shows the places visited by different people living in Australia. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the places visited by different people living in Australia.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar chart illustrates four
places
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visited by
people
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who live in
Australia
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, namely
zoo
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the zoo
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, library,
theatre
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, and
cinema
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. In detail, it presents the proportion of three kinds of
people
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coming to each
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places
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place
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including
born
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those born
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in
Australia
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, new
migrants
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born in
English-Speaking
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English-speaking
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countries
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, and new
migrants
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born in other
countries
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.
Overall
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, the proportion of
Australia
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's residents coming to
Cinema
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is the highest among the four
places
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with more than 50%,
orderly
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apply
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followed by the figure of
people
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who come to
library
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the library
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, zoo, and
theatre
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. The figure
of
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for
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people
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visiting
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theatre
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the theatre
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is the lowest at about 15%. In each
groups
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group
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of
people
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, there is
also
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a
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an
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immense difference.
People
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who are born in
Australia
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and new
migrants
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born in English-speaking
countries
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prefer visiting
cinema
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to other
places
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, especially
theatre
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. Meanwhile, new
migrants
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born in other
countries
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tend to
more
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apply
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visit both
library
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libraries
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and
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cinema
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cinemas
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.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words places, people, australia, theatre, cinema, migrants, countries with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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