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there is an increasing trend around the world to have a small family. What are some of the advantageous or disadvantageous of having a small family rather than a large one?

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Many countries in the world are extremely overpopulated so
parents
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 decide to have fewer
children
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 than in the past.
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 essay will indicate the benefits and drawbacks of having a small household. On the one hand, having one or two kids brings us a lot of advantages.
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, they will get more attention to higher quality from their
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, causing achievement.
Children
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 without siblings can be more independent and they can perform better in education.
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,
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 can participate in many extracurricular activities to give each child the best in life.
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, a small family can experience less pressure on budgets. Many countries are developing so the financial is more difficult, they have to spend money on daily necessities.
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, having a small family will allow them to make
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ends meet easily and go shopping without any difficulty by buying quality products.
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, in Japan, many households decide to have one kid so that they can maintain a balance between work and personal life more easily.
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, the negatives of having a small family are numerous. The first of these is
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 will feel lonely when they do not have any siblings, they have to do everything by themselves and they can not share or play with anyone.
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, a small family makes
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 over-caring and excessively attentive, by not allowing their sole child to play or explore.
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 reason,
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 will depend much more on their
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 so that they can not become a useful person in the future.
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 but not least, nuclear families will prevent kids from learning responsibility because they do not have any siblings to take care of them. In conclusion, having a small family can be beneficial financially and mentally.
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,
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 should
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 be careful about not leading their
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 to be selfish. Whether
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 is positive or not depends on the individual.
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I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Financial stability
  • Living standards
  • Concentrated resources
  • Parent-child bonding
  • Upbringing
  • Environmental sustainability
  • Carbon footprint
  • Supportive network
  • Cooperation
  • Multigenerational
  • Cultural traditions
  • Agricultural communities
  • Loneliness
  • Social competencies
  • Financial strain
  • Resource dilution
  • Education opportunities
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