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Today foods travel thousands of miles from the farm to the consumers Why is this? is it a positive or negative trend?

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Nowadays
The
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international nutrition
send
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foods
 from the farm to the
custmer
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customer
 even
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that
require
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en
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 extensive distance. Personally, In my opinion
that is
negartive
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negative
those
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countries
 who have been receiving food,
This
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 will explore in the following essay. One commonly cited disadvantage of
transfer
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foods
 from high long
farm
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farms
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,
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 is
waste
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the waste
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 of
time
 and money,
Nevertheless
, sometimes the producer
countries
has
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experience a delay
on
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 serving commodities to non-productive
countries
.
Hence
, the prices of
export
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 food from the land will
rised
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rise
 and
quality
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 will be a little
bite
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 inadequate for
the
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socity
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society
.
For example
, China transfer my
foods
 and commodities widely
such
 as rize and that
require
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 a lot of money and
time
Dispite
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Despite
this
, There are
a
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significant benefits of exporting
foods
 from
long distance
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farm
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farms
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. is
tremendously
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. Because will
shortage
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the
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time
 of
producing
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for producing
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foods
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food
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 inside the country
instead
 of that the human can
foncus
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focus
 on creativity and
investegating
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investigating
 on
other subject
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another subject
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such
 as
enhace
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enhance
 their ability
of building
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to build
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 an international
sturtups
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startups
 and designing new electric cars, looking into something
interested
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.
For instance
, Dubai
import
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a significant percentage of
foods
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food
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 from
china
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 and
european
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countries
.
In contrast
, they concentrate on
buiding
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building
 new
architecture
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design
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designs
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 and robotic
service
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services
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. In conclusion,
although
 there are drawbacks of
transfering
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transferring
foods
 by thousands of miles that will
rise
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raise
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 the
time
 of receiving it and it cost
a
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high
prices
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price
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 it depends on
terms
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the terms
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 and
condition
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conditions
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 of every country,
While
 the
benefits
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benefit
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 is that the state
who
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 export
foods
 will focus on other
feilds
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fields
such
 as architecture,Marketing and Building.
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