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The threat of nuclear weapons maintains the world peace. Nuclear power provides cheap and clean energy. The benefits of nuclear technology far out-weight the disadvantages.

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Some people seem to believe that the threat of nuclear bombs could help achieve world peace and that nuclear fuel is cheaper and cleaner than gas fuel.
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 is the reason they provided to help their point that the disadvantages of nuclear technology are outweighed by the positives. which is a twisted mindset to accept the threat of nuclear power, the power that could clean out the whole nation.
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 they have a point to make a clean consistent source of fuel is a great step up to humanity, but it does not outweigh the disadvantages. Let's think of it from another point of view, If any household is within reach of a nuclear source how would it be safe to live, eat and sleep, Why would you sacrifice a good and save a house just to save money
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, Now that there is a nuclear power plant next to every house
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 stops a person from stealing it and building a weapon with it you
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 put your trust in some random stranger not to be a total physicopath.
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 I think that applying cheap and clean energy that doesn't ruin the environment is good, I don't think it's worth the risk.
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