some people think that the government is wasting money on the arts and that miney could be better spent elsewhere. To what extend do you agree with this view?

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These days, most

companies

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require some important things to develop them. It means that it is applying some personal data to everyone to get a specific job ,

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, who is married or single,

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their hobbies and interests which some people guess to think is

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right things.

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, others believe that personal information is not useful for

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. In

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essay, I will discuss both aspects and I will illustrate my opinion of which is better. On the one hand,

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with, there are many positive impacts which some

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require some personal information from people who want to work for these

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. It means that they want to know who is married or single as well .

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they have special skills and interests.

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, an accounting job requires a person who has strong skills and knowledge.

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, he can travel at any time, and

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stay a long time in the working or office.

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, some people see that when

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know more personal information about anyone it is not right because the knowledge is not useful for developing the place of work.

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: a mother has two children when teams know

this

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woman is married.

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. It does not give her a business because they think who does not stay a long time working?

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, the mother strongly wants a career because wants to buy the main things for their children and she wants to have a salary. In conclusion, for all the stuff mentioned, there are merits and demerits. From my standpoint,

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must know data for everyone who wants

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job. It means that the company will be strong among many

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in the world.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 7.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 9.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

293 words

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