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The line graph below shows the household recycling rates in three different countries between 2005 and 2015.

The line graph below shows the household recycling rates in three different countries between 2005 and 2015.
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The given line graph compares the proportion of domestic waste recycling in the
UK
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,
France
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 and
Germany
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 from 2005 to 2015.
Overall
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, the recycling rates in the
UK
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 and
Germany
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 increased over the period
while
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 it actually decreased in
France
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.
According to
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 the given illustration, the
household
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 recycling
rate
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 in
France
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 was 50% in 2005 which was approximately 13% and 30% higher than that of the
UK
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 and
Germany
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 respectively. After four years,
recycling
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the recycling
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 quotient in these three countries stood at around 40% and the pace actually
increases
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increased
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 during
this
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 period both in
Germany
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 and the
UK
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while
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 it dropped in
France
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. The recycling
rate
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 in
France
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 kept on falling and in 2013 it recycled around 30%
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household
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of household
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 garbage. In the meantime, the recycling
rate
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 in
Germany
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 and the
UK
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 continually improved and both countries recycled over 50%
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of wastages
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of wastages
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wastage
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wastages
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 in 2013. In the final year, the
household
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 recycling
rate
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 in
France
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 went high than that of 2013 and stood at 40%.
In
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This
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this
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 year
household
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 recycling ratio in the
UK
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 was
highest
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the highest
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, over 60% and in
Germany
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, it was around 58%.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Basic structure: Add more body paragraphs.
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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words uk, france, germany, household, rate with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stood" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • household recycling rates
  • regional
  • line graph
  • countries
  • between
  • overall trends
  • changes
  • compare
  • ten-year period
  • differences
  • reasons
  • summarize
  • comment
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