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Some think that governments should tax unhealthy foods to encourage people to eat healthier. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Lately, a plethora of topics is being seriously talked about among various individuals, and groups, and one prominent topic is about
tax
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. There are even
people
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 who believe that the government should charge unhealthy
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 in
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, for the purpose of motivating healthy
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 consumed. If longevity and cardiac
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 are to be considered, I agree to charge the
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 on junk
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 even though others think that it will break down the fair market system. The first point I want to emphasize is that unhealthy
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 may
cause
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 serious medical
problems
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. It is a common fact that junk
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 is made with enormous additives to enhance its flavour. To illustrate, TimTam is a popular chocolate cake in Australia,
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 The snack is easy to get in every supermarket, but if we see the back side of the pack with the ingredients in the chocolate is made of massive chocolate cream, oil, and sugar. Those will
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 terrific health
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 since over standard absorb for our bodies, on the other way most
people
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 don't prefer to eat healthy foods since the taste is not good as compared with junk foods.
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, if the policy with the
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 can bring limitations and
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 encourage
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 to change their diet habits, we should support it. Another idea worth stressing is that exceeding the sugar, oil, and additives absorbed may
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 cardiac
problems
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. The reason is that these materials could
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 overfat in our body, and stop our vessels. In the news, to exemplify, hundreds of
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 die from cardiac
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 per year because their blood does not flow fluently since the vessel is stuck by fat. To recapitulate, the purpose of
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 new policy is to aid
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 in improving their diet habits.
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, I still hold the opinion that
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 should have the self-awareness to change their eating habits
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,
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 policy is just a temporary way, not permanent.
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