A large company in your area has decided to spend a certain amount of money, either to sponsor a local children's sports team for two years, or to pay for two open-air concerts. It has asked for feedback from the general public. Write a letter to the company. In your letter •describe the benefits of sponsoring the sports team •summarise the benefits of paying for the concerts •say how you think the company should spend the money

Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing in order to give you feedback about the project of sponsoring from your company to our community.
, as far as sponsoring the sports team is concerned, you will help a lot of children for two years, leading to encouraging them to realise their dreams.
For example
, you can afford new game shirts owing to the fact that they would have access to competition.
On the other hand
, there are benefits to paying for two open-air concerts,
, the city doesn’t have many exhibitions and you will help to improve the local artist community, and
, people complain about the missing activities during the summer.
but not least, I would like to suggest that you could spend your money on both activities.
For example
, one year of supporting children and one concert. In my opinion,
is the most equal analysis. Please do not hesitate to contact me if you require any
information. Kind regards, Mr Van
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