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CHILDREN SHOULD ALWAYS FOLLOW THEIR PARENTS’ ADVICE TO WHAT EXTEND DO YOU AGREE OR DISAGREE WITH THIS STATEMENT?

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From the very beginning, when we talk about our childhood we all know to listen to our
parents
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 but sometimes in our ,
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life
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 there is a situation when we need to make our own decisions. Children should always follow their parent's advice ,
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 is in our culture which we talk about at the very start. When we are at a young
age
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, our birthgivers help us with many things by giving us their perspective. Example- At a very young
age
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parents
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 told us about bad and good habits like how to talk with our older ages people and to respect them .
Parents
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 always help their kid , when her / his child is in a problem they give their advice which is very useful for us. At the
age
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 of 18 people get mature and understand what to do in their
life
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. Talking about our careers, all students are preparing for a better future and doing business.
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- some of the students want to become an engineer but their
parents
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 say they should try to become a doctor . After listening to
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 a student/child destroys his/her dream and tries to become a doctor. But in ,
life
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 we can't take over our
parents
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' dreams we need to struggle hard for a good future to live the good
life
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 which we dreamed of at a young
age
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 are the birth givers , we always listen to our
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 but when talking about our future we should always listen to our inside soul and start working.
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Ensure that ideas are logically organized, and use linking words to connect the ideas within and between paragraphs.

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    • Sentence 2 - Example
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • parental guidance
  • crucial
  • life lessons
  • best interests
  • life experience
  • understanding
  • challenges
  • invaluable
  • independence
  • critical thinking
  • relying solely
  • hinder
  • beliefs
  • desires
  • generational changes
  • rapid pace
  • social and technological changes
  • outdated
  • applicable
  • digital age
  • necessitating
  • balance
  • tradition
  • modernity
  • deeply ingrained
  • value
  • evolve
  • honoring
  • deviating
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