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The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular caribbean island between 2010 and 2017.

The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular caribbean island between 2010 and 2017.
#tourists #caribbean #island
The line graph illustrates
the
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how many tourists visited
in
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a particular
caribbean
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Caribbean
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island
 over
a
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the
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 course of 7 years starting from 2010. In general,the
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number of caribbean
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caribbean
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Caribbean
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island
 visitor had
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an increase
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increase
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increased
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in
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during
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whole
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the whole
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 period.
addiyionaly
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Additionally
,
visitors
 staying on
island
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the island
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 had
decreses
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decreases
decreased
while
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compare
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compared
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 to other places. In 2010,
visitors
 staying on cruise ships
is
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was
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 0.3
million
,
while
 study to 2011 it
raises up
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 to 0.5
million
 and
it
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remain
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remained
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 constant in 2013.
However
, in 2014,slowly raised to 1
millon
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million
.
whereas
, in 2017 it suddenly
grow
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grew
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 up to 2
million
.
However
,
visitors
 staying on
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the island
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island
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the island
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 in 2010
is
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was
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 0.8
million
 and
it
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this
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remains
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remained
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 rapidly in 2011,
Moreover
,in 2013 it debris stable
upto
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up to
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 three years but in 2016 it slowly down to 1.3
million
.
Furthermore
,in 2017 it soared to 2
million
.
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,
total
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the total
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visitors
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number of visitors
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 in 2010
is
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was
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 1
million
 but in 2012 it leapt to 1.5
millions
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million
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 and it wildly surged to 2.5
million
 in 2014,
while
 in between two
decades
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 it significantly leapt
upto
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up to
 3.5
million
of
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apply
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visitors
 in 2017.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however, while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words island, visitors, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "leap" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remain" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • fluctuation
  • peak
  • trough
  • upward trend
  • downward trend
  • steady increase
  • sharp decline
  • seasonal variation
  • cruise ship visitors
  • island stay visitors
  • economic impact
  • environmental impact
  • tourism industry
  • sustainable tourism
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