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The gap between the rich and the poor is wider than it ever has been. What are the causes of this? What can be done to solve it?

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Nowadays, the wealth
gap
 in society is bigger than at any other time in the past. There are various causes of
this
 problem, including income inequality; and several measures can be taken to address
this
 issue,
such
 as governments’ financial support. There are a number of reasons for the huge
gap
 between the rich and poor. One of the main causes is the inequality in taxes. Many international corporations when they access a new country selling their products, receive very good taxes from the government; meanwhile, the normal employees that have low incomes, must pay really high taxes.
Therefore
, the boss will be richer over time,
on the other hand
, it will be very difficult for their employees to earn more money.
Moreover
, rich
children
 will have access to the best education in their range,
while
 poor
children
 may not go to school.
Children
 who have a better education, easier for them to get high-paying jobs in the future. Meanwhile,
children
 who do not go to school will have to do manual tasks
such
 as waiters, and receptions, just enough for their living. There are many ways to tackle
this
 problem. A possible solution is the authorities’ policies. The government should encourage the wealthiest people to donate their money to build schools and medical services.
As a result
, the rich will give their money to the poor and reduce their
gap
, plus, help poor
children
 in poverty house to get a better future. A case study for
this
 is billionaire Bill Gates, he has donated more than 10 billion dollars to poor
children
 in Africa. In conclusion, many causes are enlarging the
gap
 between the rich and the poor,
nevertheless
,
this
 issue can be fixed in many different ways.
Thus
, governments around the world must be aware of
this
gap
 and help to address it.
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