The table shows information about spending money on some items in 2002.

The table shows information about spending money on some items in 2002.
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The table depicts the data about the consumerism of goods
such
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as food/drinks/tobacco, clothing/footwear,
leisure
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and leisure
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/education in five European countries (Ireland, Italy, Spain, Sweden, Turkey) in the period 2002.
Overall
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, the most popular way of spending money was food/drinks/tobacco,
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moreover
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,moreover
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Turkey was the leader who
spend
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spent
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more than the rest over 30 per
cent
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on
such
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items. In comparison, Sweden was not
so
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as
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keen as Tukey or Ireland (just under 30 per
cent
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) on food/drinks/tobacco and paid twice less just a little over 15%. The next category was clothing/footwear, as can be seen from the table, all five countries spent no more than 10 per
cent
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.
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, Italian dwellers paid 9 per
cent
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,
while
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Swedish less by nearly 30 per
cent
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(5.4 per
cent
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, respectively). The least famous consumer spending was leisure/education.
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, Turkish people preferred to pay slightly over 4 per
cent
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, but Spanish the only just under 2 per
cent
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.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "such".
Vocabulary: Replace the words cent with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "just under" was used 2 times.
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