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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Parents today are more involved in their children's education than were parents in the past. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

#parents #children #education #support
The table provides information about the satisfaction of female and male
participants
 of a city sports club They consider the club’s activity, facilities and when it will open.
Overall
, there are three categories in
this
 survey which are very satisfied, satisfied, and not satisfied. Both
participants
 are extremely satisfied with the performance of the club. Across the range of activities, the greater
proportion
 of male
participants
 is content with
this
 club (95%),
while
 the figure for female
members
 is 70%. The
proportion
 includes very satisfied and satisfied people.
Also
, the figure for not satisfied females and males is 30% and 5%, respectively.
Moreover
, more than 85% of both genders are happy about the facilities. The
proportion
 of male and female
members
 who are extremely satisfied is 63% and 64%, respectively.
Besides
,14% of male and 10% of female
members
 have negative attitudes about
this
.
In addition
, opening hours accounted for the largest
proportion
 of female
participants
 (97%) who were happy with
this
.
In contrast
, the figure for male
members
 accounted for the smallest
proportion
(63%) and the other male
members
 were not satisfied with an opening (37%).
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