The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisions where relevant.

The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019.

 Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisions where relevant.
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The line graphs illustrate the inflation in the percentage of households with electrical utilities and housework done in hours in the country from the years 1920 to 2019. There are two graphs, the first is for the proportion of households with electrical appliances and the second is for the amount of hours of housework per week in a particular country. The
house
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housework
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works
are
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washing clothes, preparing meals and cleaning. The
electronical
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electronic
devices are
washing
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the washing
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machine
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machines
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,
refrigerator
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refrigerators
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and vacuum
cleaner
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cleaners
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. From 1920, the utility of
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fridges
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skyrocketed dramatically.
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,
vacuum
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the vacuum
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cleaner
raised
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gently.
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, all of the households in the country
had
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started using vacuum
cleaner
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cleaners
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and
refrigerator
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refrigerators
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in the year 2000. The washing machine is the one that fluctuated over the period.
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others experienced only
rise
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in percentage, around 75 per cent of houses contained washing
machine
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machines
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in 2019. Apart from ownership of electronic goods, the number of working hours in the nation deflated gradually.
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, electrical appliances played a major role. These made housekeeping
as
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less time-consuming.
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, about
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of the time scale is saved in 2019 than in 1920.
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However
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, it clearly represents the enormous relationship between the working period and electrical utilities.
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