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Many people feel it is a waste of money to try to save endangered animal species, for example the tiger or the blue whale. To what extend do you agree or disagree with this statement?

#people #waste #money #species #tiger #whale
The argument of saving endangered animal
species
 is a complex debate.
While
 some agree that it is a waste of money, I agree with those who believe that it isn’t. I’m going to discuss
this
 topic in depth on my essay below.
Firstly
, there are people who believe that it’s not worth it to “waste money” saving animal
species
 rather than using them for more serious reasons that affect our society,
such
 as: climate change, wars, global pollution, and so on… on the one hand, I agree that there are several issues that affect our planet and
consequently
 us (human beings), but
on the other hand
, the fault of why
this
 animal
species
 are in danger is ours, and in many cases it’s a consequence of all the problems I listed before.
Secondly
, there are people who care about
this
 topic as much as others, without thinking that other things are less important, but putting it on the same level. In my opinion one thing takes to another: by avoiding hunting, by looking for measures in order to solve climate change and pollution,
as a consequence
 the animals
species
 extinction will reduce, and in the future we won’t have to worry anymore.
For instance
, the white bear is endangered because of the climate change. But right now,
this
 problem exists, and we have to act in order to save
this
 animals that are important for the ecosystem.
To conclude
, I agree that there are many other reasons why the government should use money for, but saving animal
species
 is not a futile issue.
Submitted by ginevra.ciaranfi2003 on

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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • endangered species
  • biodiversity
  • intrinsic value
  • existential threat
  • ecosystem
  • conservation
  • economic benefits
  • funding allocation
  • competing needs
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