Some people say that advertising is extremely successful at persuading us to buy things. Other people think that advertising is so common that we no longer pay attention to it. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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are even buying
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even become common for
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. In my own opinion, advertising is extremely successful at persuading
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to buy
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many brands promote
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products by advertising. As a brand
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advertises
the good or service
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wait to buy it. Advertising is playing
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great role in public choice.
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watch
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a
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then
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to the shop to buy that
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or service
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play
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great role in public
likes
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. From
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advertise
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kids get information
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knowledge but some
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spend more money on products.
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, some
product
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are famous because of
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even does not
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affect
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on
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some
community
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communities
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because they
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lack
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knoeledge
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knowledge
. Some groups buy
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by looking
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because of
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of awareness.
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advertises
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about some
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services
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service
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services
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for some
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society
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it has become common
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so
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that is
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useless for them.
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too common for children
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awareness about
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advertisements
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.
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NGOs should give information about products.
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both
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impact
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impacts
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too much on
people
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and for some
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people
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it is
to
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much common so it
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on
people
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. In my own opinion
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is extremely successful at persuading us to buy
things
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. But still
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affects
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a lot
on
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of
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people
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purchasing power.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • persuade
  • promote
  • attract
  • influence
  • impact
  • consumerism
  • commercialism
  • market
  • product
  • brand
  • endorsement
  • manipulative
  • saturated
  • overwhelmed
  • repetitive
  • distracting
  • irrelevant
  • exaggerated
  • misleading
  • desensitized
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