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In many countries, people increasingly talk about money such as how much they earn or how much they pay for things in their daily conversations. Why? Is this a positive or negative trend?

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Nowadays, a lot of people
making
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 conversation about how much they earn or spend on
daily
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a daily
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 basis. The reason is because of
increased
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 importance of finances and it is usually
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the negative
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situation
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 in countries. The main cause why
majority
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the majority
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 of people devote
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talking
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 to money is because
that is
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 becoming
leading
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a leading
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 problem
of
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 their
life
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. It is very actual
to
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majority
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the majority
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 to share with their problems relatives, friends and family. Economic instability, monumentally price
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 all that stuff lead
masses
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the masses
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 to communicate about
cash
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the cash
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situation
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.
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, Switzerland has one of the highest salaries in the world and
lowest
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the lowest
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 level of inflation and
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 statistic their conversation topics is about family, friends and themselves. I totally think that
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 tendency that shows about
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situation
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the situation
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 in the governments. When people
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 how more they are paying for
the
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apply
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milk,
meal
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meals
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 or
another daily products
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another daily product
other daily products
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, it can
contributes
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 to stressful situations and health problems, only because they will not
able
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 to pay for groceries or house-rent. Usually, individuals would not mention issues
things
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or things
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 they are concerned
for
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about
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.
Poor
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The poor
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 economic
situation
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 in the countries
one
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 of the main causes of it. If residents had more financial welfare, they would give attention in daily conversations to more important things,
such
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 as family, friends or children.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • consumerism
  • materialism
  • financial transparency
  • societal taboos
  • economic fluctuations
  • financial management
  • financial literacy
  • purchasing decisions
  • wealth glorification
  • economic stratification
  • social comparison
  • peer pressure
  • income disparity
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