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The best way to make road transport safer is to make vehicle drivers take a driving test each year. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#road #transport #vehicle #drivers #test #year
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are argued
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 that
driver
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drivers
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 need to participate in driving
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test
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tests
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 every
year
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road
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 transport safer in the future. From my perspective, I strongly agree with
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 the given statement, I firmly believe that
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 a driving
test
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 each
year
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 can make global
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citizens
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can
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make sure that they
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 the rules on the
road
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.
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,
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this
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 pressure will increase driver’s
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 when they go
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road
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. To cite an example, in Viet
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 there are a huge amount of
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 who do not conform to the rule they do not like wearing a helmet when riding a motorcycle.
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 the driving
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 each
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identification of
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identify
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 driving abilities
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ages
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 or health issues.
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,
people
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 who have issues about
overall
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 well-being
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 a vehicle might cause unintended consequences. Explaining some of the
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 in favour
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this
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 statement. It is true that taking the driving
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 every
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promoting
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responsibilities
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behavior
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 through public
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 campaigns.
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,
individual
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 will
rise
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raise
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 their own
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, in the light of the fact that
people
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 when
take
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 the
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they
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have to prepare for it so it can increase
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awareness
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.
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, the best way to make the
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 safer is to make drivers take the driving
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 every
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. I believe that
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 points are strongly supporting my view of
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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