Social media is gradually replacing imperson face to face contact with many people worldwide. Do the benefits of social media outweigh the disadvantages?

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and
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of everyone having access to at least a mobile phone, it is now possible to talk and even see everybody wherever they are through
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social
media
.
This
raises the question of whether these applications are worth reducing our
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connections or
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is better for us to stick to the old ways. I personally prefer
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conversations.
Although
you can save a lot of
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social
media
to connect to the outer world, it never feels real enough and eventually, it gets boring.
Firstly
, it is not a lie if we state that social
media
has helped humanity a lot. Indeed, if it wasn't for all these technologies, we couldn't attend the scrum
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in the morning, communicate with our professor until noon and talk to our parents
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when we feel lonely in
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. So, using social
media
has the advantage of saving
time
, energy and money.
Also
, we would need to travel long distances to be able to meet our friends that we've missed so much.
For instance
, my grandmother and I, call my aunt every weekend since she has moved to another country and I can really feel how much it means to my grandmother
as well as
my aunt.
Thus
, social networks enable us to do more work,
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more energy and money at the same
time
.
On the other hand
,
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beats a group meeting in your
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. Almost everyone I know, admits that face-timing doesn't help at all when they miss someone.
Furthermore
, one cannot understand how others really feel behind their cameras
while
you could easily tell when you meet them
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.
For example
,
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the pandemic, my friends and I called each other frequently.
However
, you could feel that we were drifting apart from each other. But, the pandemic is now over and we are back together just like
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old days.
Hence
, communicating through social
media
never guarantees quality
time
with your friends and family
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a
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meet-up that will boost
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mood
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.
To conclude
, deciding between social
media
and a good
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meeting at the bar
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is indeed a tough challenge.
This
decade is called the decade of social
media
for a good reason and we can clearly understand all the
time
and money it saves us. But, once you experience the distance between you and your loved ones, never in a world would you change the feeling of being in their presence with anything.
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  • Global connectivity
  • Maintain relationships
  • Information dissemination
  • Educational opportunities
  • Entrepreneurial initiatives
  • Low-cost marketing
  • Adverse effects
  • Mental health
  • In-person social skills
  • Digital communication
  • Privacy concerns
  • Over-sharing
  • Security risks
  • Misinformation
  • Fake news
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