Social media is gradually replacing imperson face to face contact with many people worldwide. Do the benefits of social media outweigh the disadvantages?
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media
. This
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impersonate
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real life
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real-life
Although
you can save a lot of time
using the
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media
to connect to the outer world, it never feels real enough and eventually, it gets boring.
Firstly
, it is not a lie if we state that social media
has helped humanity a lot. Indeed, if it wasn't for all these technologies, we couldn't attend the scrum session
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job
. So, using social Fix the agreement mistake
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media
has the advantage of saving time
, energy and money. Also
, we would need to travel long distances to be able to meet our friends that we've missed so much. For instance
, my grandmother and I, call my aunt every weekend since she has moved to another country and I can really feel how much it means to my grandmother as well as
my aunt. Thus
, social networks enable us to do more work, have
more energy and money at the same Correct word choice
and have
time
.
On the other hand
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. Almost everyone I know, admits that face-timing doesn't help at all when they miss someone. Change the capitalization
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Furthermore
, one cannot understand how others really feel behind their cameras while
you could easily tell when you meet them in-person
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in person
For example
, in
the pandemic, my friends and I called each other frequently. Change preposition
during
However
, you could feel that we were drifting apart from each other. But, the pandemic is now over and we are back together just like the
old days. Change preposition
in the
Hence
, communicating through social media
never guarantees quality time
with your friends and family unlike
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face to face
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To conclude
, deciding between social media
and a good old fashioned
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,
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This
decade is called the decade of social media
for a good reason and we can clearly understand all the time
and money it saves us. But, once you experience the distance between you and your loved ones, never in a world would you change the feeling of being in their presence with anything.Submitted by parham.moonesi on
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