In many countries around the world, rural people are moving to cities, so the population in the countryside is decreasing. Do you think this is a positive or negative development

It is indeed true that
cities
have more facilities than rural
areas
. In recent times a lot of
people
move
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have moved
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to
cities
from rural
area
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areas
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which
causes
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caused
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the countryside population to decrease. In my
opinion
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it is not a positive development for a
county
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country
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.
This
essay will discuss what will happen when
people
move
cities
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from cities
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to the countryside.
To begin
with,
cities
provided a good life for living but already those
people
who lived in
cities
faced various problems in their life. Housing is one of the biggest problems
of
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in
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cities
. More and more
people
try to change their destination
due
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to
living
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live
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a good life for the reason they need more housing. Another problem is traffic jams which are increasing
day
by
day
for
people
moving
to
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from
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the countryside to
cities
.
For example
,
according to
the newspaper
prothom
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Alo, in the
last
10
years
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traffic jams have increased to twice as much as before in Bangladesh
due to
overpopulation in Dhaka city.
On the other hand
, developing rural
areas
would be stopped when
people
move
to
cities
. The government would not care about working for real
people
. If he was staying there, the authority should keep
focus
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the focus
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on
this
area and it is highly possible to create a new employment sector in those particular
areas
which
helps
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would help
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the local
people
to get employment.
Example
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For example
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in Bangladesh
due to
our population in Dhaka city the government decided to develop rural
areas
and give them more facilities and create new employment for them.
To conclude
, serious
people
have more
opportunity
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opportunities
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than rural
people
but if everyone's tiles
move
It is
then
the country's economy would be demolished
day
by
day
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • rural-to-urban migration
  • population shift
  • positive impact
  • negative impact
  • urbanization
  • job opportunities
  • access to education
  • access to healthcare
  • urban infrastructure
  • rural traditions
  • cultural heritage
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