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Some people think that you can never become fluent in a languange unless you have spent time living or working in that country. To what extent do you agree?

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Language
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 is a significant part of human communication and it is a skill that can be learned through practice only. Many societies believe to become fluent in a
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 they need to be working, living, and studying in a foreign country. I strongly disagree with the statement that living abroad makes the learning process faster and easier;
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, there are several methods for
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 to be eloquent in a foreign
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.
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,
people
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 who live in foreign countries eventually can speak the local
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 because they build the habit of communicating with local
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 on a daily basis. A human brain grabs the
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 quickly if they are surrounded by
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 with a common
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.
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, Indonesian youngsters who prefer to study abroad in
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 countries
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 as the United States and the United Kingdom, cannot speak
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 fluently at first because their mother tongue is Indonesia.
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, as time passed, they started to develop their
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 skills by interacting with students who were born in
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 countries. Other than that, staying in a foreign land is not the only technique to become more fluent in a
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. There are many other factors which play a main role in the learning process. To state one, nowadays
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 can learn a
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 by reading books or taking a course with an expert.
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, many institutions provide
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 courses for society who
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 about increasing their
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 skills. The lecturers vary from local
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 who already certified and foreigners that had been stayed for a long time in one country. In conclusion, living abroad in a foreign country makes the learning process smoother.
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, proficiency can be gained by reading books or taking a course, too.
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