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The table below gives information about population in Australia and Malaysia in 1980 and 2002. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table below gives information about population in Australia and Malaysia in 1980 and 2002. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The table shows
statistic
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statistics
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of
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on
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Australian
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the Australian
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 and Malaysian
population
 from 1980 to 2002. It
presents
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is presented
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 in millions and
percentage
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percentages
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.
Overall
,
both
countries
 have
increase
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an increase
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 in
number
 of total
population
, especially, Malaysia. There are similar
in
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apply
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number
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numbers
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 of male and female
population
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populations
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. Their birth rate
decrease
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decreases
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 over time. The
number
 of elderly
increase
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increased
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 in
both
countries
 with a significant
differrence
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difference
on
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in
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 Australia.
Number
 of
population
 in Australia
is
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was
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 similar to Malaysia in 1980, but in 2002, Malaysian
citizen
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citizens
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rise
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rose
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 to approximately 24
millions
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million
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 people.
Male
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Males
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 and
female
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females
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 in
both
countries
 are in the same proportion around 50% in
both
 years and they stay the same over the period.
Rate
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The rate
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 of birth decreases in
both
countries
. Malaysia
decrease
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decreased
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1
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by 1
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% ,
while
 Australia slightly decrease
0.1
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by 0.1
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%.
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Basic structure: Add more body paragraphs.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words population, both, countries, number with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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