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Some people think that you can never become fluent in a languange unless you have spent time living or working in that country. To what extent do you agree? #people #languange #time

#people #languange #time #country
Many believe that they could be fluent in
English
 if they will be in abroad. It seems to me that there are other many methods available by which
people
 can easily improve their
english
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 speaking skills as well.
To begin
 with,
people
 could easily learn a new
language
 if they
lives
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 in
foreign
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 because they would daily communicate with the local
people
. But no one cannot be fluent in any
language
 when they
moved
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 to foreign countries.
For instance
, when indians migrate to
United
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the United
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 Kingdom or
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the united
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united states
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United States
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 or other countries
then
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apply
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they are not used to with
english
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language
 and they face many difficulties
while
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with
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communication
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communicating
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 but they can be
good
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better
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in
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at
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english
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by
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with
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 each passing day as they have conversations with native
people
. Other than that, It is not necessary to migrate
in
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to
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foreign
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a foreign
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 country to learn a foreign
language
.
People
 could be better in any
language
 if they practice by themselves. They can join any academy or course as well. They can
also
 watch
english
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 movies ,
listen
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english
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 songs,
reading
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and read
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 books to evaluate their interpersonal skills.
Thus
 , it is not necessary to go abroad to learn a new
language
. Everyone can learn it in their own country by spending time on their own
habbits
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habits
.
To sum up
,
although
,
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 someone could be better in
foreign
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a foreign
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language
 if they migrate to foreign countries , they can
be improve
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improve
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 themselves
by
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in
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 other ways too.
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