The lower chart depicted the percentage change of International students share among university graduates in different Canadian`s provinces between 2001 and 2006.

The lower chart depicted the percentage change of International students share among university graduates in different Canadian`s provinces between 2001 and 2006.
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share among university graduates in different
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provinces between 2001 and 2006. It can be clearly seen from the data that the most popular was
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New Brunswick`s university for
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both ages, there had been
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around 12% in 2006 and approximately 8% in 2001.
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place was
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Ontario,
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International graduates reached just
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5 per cent in 2006, and
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nearly 3 per cent in 2001.
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three counties could pass the 10% mark in 2006, there are
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New Brunswick, Nova Scotia, and
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British Columbia.
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New Brunswick, Nova Scotia and
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Quebec. In general, in 2006
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foreign learners
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more actively involved in
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education than the pupils in 2001.
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