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It is responsibilty of government to take care of health of citizens or citizens should take care of their own health. Give your opinion.

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Proponents argue that the government should be accountable for the well-being of the people of the country
whereas
 opponent believes that individuals must take care of their own fitness. In my view of thinking, it is totally the choice of a person to follow a healthy lifestyle or to live in an unfit body. The government could control it up to a small extent through awareness campaigns
as well as
 the laws in food quality checks.
To begin
 with, in
this
 globalization era, multiple choices are available in the food
as well as
 in the entertainment categories.
As a result
, people are largely involved in the consumption of unhealthy edible items, and
additionally
, they are minimising their physical activities
due to
 TV and gaming addiction.
Consequently
, obesity and diabetes have become the most common problems for every regime across the world. Health advisories of India,
for instance
, have deduced that 68% of Indians are on unhealthy diets, and 80% of them are obese with blood pressure issues. Humans could stop being fat and physically weak by avoiding
such
 inappropriate practices.
On the other hand
, the country's officials could help the citizens by encouraging them to follow a good healthy lifestyle. To achieve
this
 goal, city councils should not only set up health-related drives for citizens but
also
 bring some quality assurance policies for consumables around the neighbourhood.
Due to
this
, people might start adhering to better life practices that could positively impact the well-being of the nation.
For example
, my nephew's school have instructed the students to stop their family members from eating fast food, and the family has seen some good results within a few months.
To conclude
,
although
 it is an individual's responsibility to control the unlikely habits that are dangerous to physical fitness, the government could minimise
such
 impacts on society by setting up a few policies for their citizens.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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