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These day in many countries, fewer and fewer people want to become teachers, particularly in secondary schools

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In many parts of the world, there has been a sharp drop in the number of people considering teaching in
highschool
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as their future career. In my opinion, it is understandable
due to
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 the low salary of
teachers
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 and the detrimental behaviour of pupils;
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, both parents and
government
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the government
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 should tackle
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 problem.
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 with, one of the main causes of the issue is that
teachers
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 receive a lower income than other jobs. In fact, it is not fair that
teachers
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’ salaries have not kept pace with that of other professions, namely medicine or law.
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 to say, those who are passionate about teaching may not find their pay satisfied with their efforts;
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, in
Viet Nam
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, a marketing manager will earn twice as much as a teacher with the same experience. Another reason is that pupils, nowadays, behave detrimentally in class.
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,
such
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 pupils will make many
teachers
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 feel tired and stressed, which
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 a negative impact on their mental health. To solve
this
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 burden, it is beneficial for the government to encourage by raising
teachers
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’
salary
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 significantly.
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, with higher salaries, more and more people would like to consider teaching as their major or
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 prospect. In terms of disobeyed students, parents should educate their children with a sense of respect for
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, in order to make them behave well in class.
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, the good attitude of children can act as a motive in order to attract potential
teachers
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 as well. In conclusion, the low salary within the bad attitude of children are two main reasons why people are not likely to become
teachers
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; my view is that
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 the main responsibility for solving the problem lies with the government and parents.

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