The map below shows changes to a park in 1980 and now

The map below shows changes to a park in 1980 and now
The map displays a park in 1980 and the changes that have been made until now.
Overall
, the number of facilities has increased since 1980
while
the green area has been diminished.
Besides
, two doors have been removed.
To begin
, two routes have been built as they connect the north and south, and west and east
while
they meet each other in the centre of the park. On the south side of the park, there are benches with a small pond as they were in the past,
however
, flowers have been replaced by the bush. A playground has been placed on the right side of the south area, which used to be flowers. As can be seen, in the north right-corner-hand, a lot of trees has been cut in order to prepare an empty spot for camping purpose.
Consequently
, some camping facilities including chairs, desks and barbecue has been set up in front of these trees.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "changes" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • transformed
  • expanded
  • renovated
  • upgraded
  • revamped
  • refurbished
  • install
  • addition
  • increase
  • enhance
  • improve
  • introduce
  • upgrade
  • create
  • development
  • facilities
  • recreational areas
  • wildlife habitats
  • pathways
  • walkways
  • seating areas
  • lighting arrangements
  • ponds
  • lakes
  • sports facilities
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