Many manufactured food and drink products high levels of sugar, which causes many health problems. Sugary products should me made more expensive to encourage people to consume less sugar. Do you agree or disagree?

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Health issues
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caused by
food
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products
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which contain
high
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a high
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amount of
sugar
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in them.
People
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suggest that
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we can lessen the usage of sugary items by increasing the cost of these sugary
products
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. I disagree with
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solution because rich
people
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may not
be encourage
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to consume less
sugar
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and it can create problems for poor
people
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as well.
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the price of
products
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that are made of
sugar
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will not affect
people
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with wealth because
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thing will not stop them
to purchase
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from purchasing
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sugary
food
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.
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,
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sugar addicted
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sugar-addicted
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people
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with a lot of money may stock a large quantity of sugary
food
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for themselves in order to overcome any type
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of difficulty
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that
occur
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in future.
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according to
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a research article, the population of
millionares
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millionaires
in Singapore is more than 50%. So,
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implementing the solution of expensive sugary
food
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will not mitigate the utilization of
sugar
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products
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.
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,
this
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thing will lead towards shortage of the
products
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due to
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stock.
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, I disagree because
this
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suggestion can cause problems for poor
people
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. Individuals who can just afford these
food
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items as a part of
meal
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the meal
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for their family may suffer a lot.
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, sometimes parents
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buy chocolates and various types of drinking juice for their children as
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or as
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to see
happiness
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the happiness
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on their
childrens
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children's
children
face
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,
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strategy would
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disturbance for average income families.
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, the solution of expensive sugary
products
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will disturb the citizens in a developing country with
low level
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low-level
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income and can cause many family
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.
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,
people
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will
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may go through
illness
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illnesses
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related to stress and depression. In conclusion, health problems related to sugary
food
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is an alarming
stituation
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situation
for
world
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the world
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and trying to decline the intake of
food
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items with
high
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a high
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percentage
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percentages
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of
sugar
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by increasing the cost of the
products
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is not an effective idea. Because it will not encourage any class of
people
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.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • health problems
  • manufactured food and drink products
  • sugary products
  • excessive sugar consumption
  • discourage
  • promote
  • healthier choices
  • reduce
  • increased taxes
  • fund
  • health education
  • prevention programs
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