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In the future, nobody will buy printers newspaper or books because they will be able to read everything, they want online without paying. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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Nowadays, printed newspapers and
books
 are off the market
due to
 the
techonological
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technological
 advances that we have in where everything is one click away including reading articles or
books
 for free with our own gadget. I strongly agree with the above notion and
this
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about
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it.
To begin
 with, technology
offers
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wide
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 array of help especially to students since
pandemic
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strikes
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 in 2020. E-
books
 and online learning
has
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 become utilized since face-to-face classes
has
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 been prohibited.
For instance
,
instead
 of buying
books
 at a bookstore,
student
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 can acquire the same notes online using their own gadget even for free. Acquiring these online offers them a lot of resource materials and more information about a book
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which the internet provides.
In addition
, carrying heavy
boooks
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books
 going to school has been outdated.
This
 will be less hassles
to
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 pupils and
helps
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 them prevent back injury in carrying overloaded bags.
Secondly
,
people
 can
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 more knowledge and information easily and more
effiicient
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efficiently
 since online
news
 reporting
are
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also
 common nowadays. So
wide
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 range of
people
 will be informed well through the
news
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 the internet
on
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 a timely manner. As long as the
news
 site is legit and trusted,
people
 can be aware anytime and anywhere
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 the issues
wordwide
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worldwide
 using their own cellphones unlike before only
few
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knows
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 the
some
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information..
To sum up
, I strongly agree that
people
 now are more
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on reading
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news
 and
books
 online since it is more convenient,
budget friendly
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 for free subscriptions
books
 and more efficient. Printed
books
 and newspapers may still be
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 but declining its consumer in the near future.
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