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-Smacking the children is the best form of discipline. To what extent do you agree or disagree.

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There are lots of methods that families
do
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use
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 to
discipline
 their
children
. One of these methods is using physical punishments. Some
parents
 believe that beating up their siblings is the best
way
 to
instill
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discipline
 into their life.
This
 essay will argue slapping the
children
 to
discipline
 is entirely preposterous. Throughout decades most
parents
 agreed that to
discipline
 their
children
, they need to frighten them with physical blows. These types of
parents
 dominate their
children
 with painful slaps and believe that their
children
 will listen to whatever they say after on. Their aim is to make their
children
’s
behaviour
 more convenient and appropriate for society or just affect their
behaviour
 in a positive
way
.
For instance
, if the child does not like their food and splits it out of his/her mouth, they slap them immediately and what they expect is; that when the split food is on their menu again, their
children
 will not spoile, remember their fear and eat it. Indeed, there are specific studies which show that
children
 to
listen
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 their
parents
 in the short term if
werethey
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were they
 afraid of their
parents
.
Therefore
, slapping or smacking the
children
 cannot be the best
way
 to
discipline
 them but for some ,
parents
 it does help control the
children
’s
behaviour
. Despite the fact that
parents
 can control their
children
 with smacking, the idea that it is the best
way
 to
discipline
 them is completely preposterous. Exposure to violence at an early age can lead to serious psychological problems when they grow up. Studies show that
children
 who are beaten by their families can be either less self-confident or more aggressive and violent toward other people.
Thus
, when
parents
 think they can educate their
children
’s
behaviour
 with violence they may get the opposite results.
This
 essay argued that
parents
 who beat their
children
 to
discipline
 them have a flawed understanding educating of
children
 and a lack
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information regarding the results of their actions. In my opinion, smacking the
children
 is the most disrespectful and inefficient
way
 to involve
discipline
 in a child’s life.
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