Nowadays men’s sport is given far more attention in the3 society then women sports. What are the reasons and do you think is it a positive or negative situation?

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, there is a misconception that
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men’s
sport
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women
and give them more attention
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.
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idea and I think it is not fair.
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is sad but true that sports and rigorous exercise
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to men’s world since ancient days.
For instance
, in Greek, and prehistoric cultures most of
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and symbols related to power
represented
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in
man
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gender
.
Moreover
, these metaphoric creatures usually possess extraordinary power related to saving human lives and
this
power
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rigorous exercise and
sport
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activities.
While
, at the same time their wives used to take the responsibility of upbringing their child and they were mostly occupied with households.
Consequently
, the concept of physical activities and men show strong connection. I personally reckon
this
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is faulty and there is nothing positive about it. To clarify, the idea
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the exact meaning of
gender
discrimination
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,
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women
have always fought for their primitive rights against
gender
bias and
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behavior
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.
As a result
, they deserve more attention and encouragement in
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the sport
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sport
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sports
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realm to show their abilities. To clarify,
sport
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sports
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events bring numerous opportunities for
women
to represent and prove their strength and defeat old stereotypes related to
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sports.
To conclude
, the
gender
prejudice behind
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is rooted in our history and it is absolutely an ordeal to change the game
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women
’s side.
Also
,
women
need more space to change
this
perception and validate their potential strength.
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