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Some believe that education success is based on good teachers and others believe that it depends upon student attitude. Discuss both view and give your opinion with relevant example.

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Education
 depends on what? some believe that
education
 success depends on good
teachers
 and others think Whether there are excellent
teachers
 or not, it is about student attitude. There are two different views we are going to discuss . On the one hand, in primary,middle and high
school
 ,
usually
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 it is based on great
teachers
 to make sure children get the right information.
For example
, the students who have got bad
teacher
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teachers
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 in grade
school
 there is a chance that they will not succeed in middle and secondary
school
. Because here we are talking about the base for their general information it depends on their
education
 and their learning based on the
teachers
.
On the other hand
, in university, it is all about your hard work and the time you spend on your self-study.
For instance
, whether you are good at
school
 or not, if you go to college
teachers
 will not teach you, they are here just to guide you and it is all on you.
To sum up
, based on what has been discussed above, in my opinion in
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i
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 see that it is based on
teachers
 but
also
 it is the family whether they take care of or not . They are supposed to keep following their children so they can build a good
education
 base. And in university, it will going to be all
depends
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 on student attitude .
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