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Over population of urban areas has led to numerous problems. identify 1-2 serious ones, and suggest ways in which the government and individuals can tackle these problems

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Nowadays,
cities
 are becoming bigger
due to
 development and it has caused a great number of troubles.
This
 is mainly attributable to
over
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over-immigration
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immigration
 and public transportation and can be solved by decentralizing facilities and enforcing laws by
government
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the government
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.
To begin
 with, there are a lot of
facilites
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facilities
 in big
cities
 and because of
this
reason
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,reason
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 many
people
 come to metropolitan
cities
 to take
advatange
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advantage
 of the amenities.
This
 results in, over
immigration
 of
people
 from rural areas to urban areas and the
cities
 may become crowded and polluted and the traffic will become bumper to bumper.
Moreover
, public transportation is considered
as
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apply
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a beneficial issue. Poor
qulity
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quality
 of the means of transportation has caused numerous problems.
People
 are rather reluctant to use trains,subways and cabs.
In
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result
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a result
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, there is heavy traffic in
cities
 especially during rush hours. Many practical measures can be taken by government to tackle these issues.
First,
authorities should decentralize the facilities to stop
over
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over-immigration
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immigration
.
Thus
,
people
 will not leave their homes in the hope of finding a better job.
Thus
, they will stay
at
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in
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 their
cities
 and villages.
Second,
it should form new laws
due to
 moving from small
cities
 to big ones. In
this
 case,
government
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the government
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 can control the rate of
immigration
 and stop the
over
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over-immigration
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immigration
.
Thus
 the metropolitan
cities
 are not as crowded as they are now. By way of conclusion,
this
 essay discussed the principal causes of
over population
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overpopulation
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 which are lack of amenities and lack of
apropiate
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appropriate
 of governing and the ways to solve them.
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