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The map illustrates the between and predicted future Islip town centre.

The map illustrates the between and predicted future Islip town centre.
The map depicts
predicted
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the predicted
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 project of Islip
town
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centre
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.
Overall
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, it is
noticebale
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noticeable
 that the
town
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centre
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 will be redeveloped into
modernized
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the modernized
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centre
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.
However
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, now it very old
town
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centre
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.
To begin
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 with shops on the north side of the
town
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, it will be enlarged with more areas.
Moreover
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, it will
be include
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include
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bus
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a bus
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 station, shopping
centre
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 and car park. The countryside will be removed .
Furthermore
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,
a
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apply
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new housing with
road
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a road
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 will be constructed on the east and south
side
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sides
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 of the
town
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. Another striking change is that the main road will be converted
instead
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 of pedestrians and shops
which
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apply
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placed near housing will be moved
in
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to
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 the middle of the
town
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.
Therefore
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,
a
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apply
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housing will be moved on the west and south side of the
town
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.
However
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,
a
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the
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 park will be
smaler
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smaller
 than
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the previous
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previous
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oneprevious
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. A notable change is that the dual carriageway will be extended. In conclusion, the
town
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centre
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 will be introduced as the new development.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
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Basic structure: Use less body paragraphs.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words town, centre with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "moved" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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