Thye diagram shows the information about the productionb of beer
The diagram depicts data about the manufacture of
beer
.
Overall
it is noticeable that there are 11 main stages of production of beer
, which start from milling and end with packing. In addition
, only the last
stage requires manual work when people
pack beer
in various places, whereas
others can be done with different equipment.
To begin
with, people
malted barley through milling and after it was exported to mashing where it
produce water. Therefore
, it is laundered with grain animal feed. However
, this
process requires a durable time . After that, it boils when people
add hops and sugar which plays
a crucial part of producing beer
. The next phase of the process is called whirlpool where beer
cooling and fermenting. However
, it includes some compounds, such
as yeast and CO2. Following that
it maturing and filtering which requires a lot of time, approximately 3 hours. Ultimately, in the final stages, it is packaged in many ways , such
as buses and bottles. However
, this
process repeated again as soon as people
started production of beer
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