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Some people say that it is not possible to be happy without money, while others think that money does not gaurantee happiness. Discusss both views and give your own opinion.

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Some say that it is impossible to be joyful without
money
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,
whereas
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 others believe that it does not guarantee a joyful
life
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.
Although
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 with a colossal amount of
money
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, a person can live a luxurious
life
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, in my opinion,
friends
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 and family play a vital role in
overall
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 happiness. On the one hand, with huge finances, we can buy luxuries.
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,
people
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 who have huge finances can buy expensive houses and cars, and they can enjoy their
lives
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.
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, high net-worth individuals in India
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 as Bollywood actors and sportsperson stay in the limelight
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 they enjoy a luxurious
life
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.
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, I believe that in their personal
lives
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, they feel lonely
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 a lack of quality time with their
friends
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 and families.
On the other hand
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, family and
friends
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 play an important role in making
life
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 happy.
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 is because many individuals live their
lives
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 to the fullest even though they lack
money
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, but they have family and
friends
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 to share their ups and downs.
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, in a survey done in India, it was found that
people
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 with low income are less prone to cognitive disorders because they have their close ones to enjoy
life
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.
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, I opine that
money
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 does not guarantee happiness rather our close ones are more important. In conclusion, some think that without
money
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people
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 cannot be happy,
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 others believe that it does not provide happiness.
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people
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 can live high-class
lives
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 with huge finances, in my opinion, family and
friends
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 are more important to make
life
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 joyful.
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