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Some people think that books are losing importance as a source of information and entertainment. To what extent do you agree

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Nowadays reading
books
 is becoming very unpopular among
people
. Several
people
 consider that
books
 are not only losing their importance for being the blunder of knowledge but
also
 as the source of entertainment in
people
's lives. I do agree with the statement and will discuss how several factors like the
internet
 and technology are replacing it. To start with, the
internet
 is the root cause of
this
 replacement.
This
 is simply because, from basic to advanced educational topics, everything is easily accessible via the
Internet
,
that is
 why
books
 are becoming less attractive when it comes to finding any topic with which
people
 are struggling. YouTube,
for example
, is a platform that not only provides information on specific topics but
also
 explains them thoroughly, which somehow we cannot expect from
books
. Moving
further
, the advanced technology is attracting
people
 towards them. Innovation of technology provided numerous gadgets and applications in the market that are able to provide fun which today's generation is looking for after having a long day.
For instance
, gadgets like PlayStation, mobile phones, and laptops give several options
such
 as games, social media applications, and many others to an individual when it comes to entertainment,
however
,
books
 cannot provide all these things. In conclusion, the
internet
 and advanced pieces of equipment are influencing
people
 to a very great extent since they are easy to use and provide innumerable sources for enjoyment and information,
whereas
books
 are not preferred by folks in order to get both of these things.
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coherence cohesion
Ensure that each paragraph presents a clear main point and supports it with relevant details and examples. Avoid repetition and ensure a clear flow of ideas throughout the essay.
task response
Provide a more detailed analysis of the extent to which you agree or disagree with the prompt. Make sure to address all aspects of the topic and use specific examples to support your points.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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