The graph below shows the changing patterns of access to modern technology in homes in the UK. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the changing patterns of access to modern technology in homes in the UK. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The following graph depicts the accessibility of different modern technology items in homes in the UK between 1994 and 2008. Those items include
CD
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a CD
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player,
DVD
player, mobile phone and Internet connection.
Overall
, we can observe
upward
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an upward
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trend in the patterns of access of each item on the illustration. The
least
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lowest
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percentage
of people had
DVD
players
in their household in 2002/03. It made up only around 30%.
On the contrary
, the item with the highest
percentage
of accessibility was
CD
players
with approximately 50% of
users
.
However
, in 2008,
DVD
players
became the most popular technological item, if we take into account that roughly 90% of the population of the UK had it.
Although
, approximately 70% of the English people had
the
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apply
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access to the Internet connection in 2008. In 1994,
CD
players
were quite popular almost 50% of the population had
it
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one
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, and we can see
gradual
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a gradual
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increase
in
its
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their
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percentage
until 2004/05
,
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apply
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after we observe
slight
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a slight
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decrease. The
CD
players
reached a peak of almost 90% in 2004/05. The popularity of mobile phones fluctuated until 2002/03. After we can see
increase
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an increase
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in its number of
users
until 2006/07, which is followed by a slight
increase
in 2008. Mobile phones reached a peak of almost 80% in 2008. We can observe a dramatic
increase
in the
percentage
of
users
of
DVD
players
from 2002/03 until 2004/05, followed by a gradual
increase
until 2008. The access to the Internet connection follows the same pattern and reaches the highest
pint
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point
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of
users
2008
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in 2008
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with more than 60% of the population of the UK.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words cd, dvd, percentage, players, users, increase with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 5 times.
Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "gradual" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "slight" was used 2 times.
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