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Some people are of the opinion that there should be a cae-free day once every month, on which no private vehicles are allowed on the road. Discuss the advantages and possible disadvantages.

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Nowadays, many
people
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 are asking for a car-less
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 once in a
while
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 in which nobody is allowed to use their personal cars and everybody should just use clean transportation. I believe it is a nice reminder about our environment and could raise awareness in
people
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 but at the same time, I am not sure of it working out in a meaningful way. So, I believe it could create a false sense of effectiveness and
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 stop
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 from truly fighting for a cleaner environment.
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, to have a
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 once a month specified for the preservation of our habitat
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 is generally a good thing. It automatically sends a few words to whoever pays attention to the calendar and raises awareness.
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, it conveys the message that the earth is in more danger now than it has ever been.
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, it wasn't until they added a miners'
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 to the calendars that we found what a hard-working group of
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 they are.
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, adding a carless
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 to our calendars will help
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 pay more attention to their surrounding
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.
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, there is a threat hidden in
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 act and
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, we humans might feel so satisfied with ourselves that we begin to be destructive again. Certainly, one
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 of streets being free of private vehicles does not reduce the extent to which we have ruined our environment.
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,
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 get easily fooled by their own acts and eventually, might give up on every other environmental activity they do
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 of them not taking out their cars for one
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.
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, some
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 do a few push-ups every
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 and avoid going to the gym because they consider those push-ups as proper exercise. So, we tend to fool ourselves on a daily basis and we certainly don't want that to happen when we're talking about our nature.
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, the scheme of adding a carless
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 to our official calendars
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 is in itself a good thing. But, we might want to look out for all the lies we are going to tell ourselves after we've done it and
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, avoid getting back to the previous phase of our history in which we destroyed nature.

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