The table below gives information about population in Australia and Malaysia in 1980 and 2002. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The table provides details regarding the different entities related to
population
in two distinct places in the Use synonyms
years
1980 and 2002. Use synonyms
Overall
, the total Linking Words
population
in Use synonyms
both
areas increased over the Use synonyms
years
Use synonyms
while
there was a reduction in the birth rate.
Linking Words
To begin
with, in Australia, the total male count was constant at 49.9 % in Linking Words
both
Use synonyms
years
.Use synonyms
Similarly
, the same trend of equal value was seen in the female gender as well. Linking Words
However
, in Malaysia, the percentage of males increased over the period Linking Words
whereas
a reverse trend was evident Linking Words
from
the female Change preposition
in
population
. People over the age of 65 were 9.6% in the former place Use synonyms
initially
and inclined up to 12.4% Linking Words
while
the latter place's value was 4.3% in 2002.
Linking Words
It is clear that
the birth rate in Linking Words
both
Australia and Malaysia decreased over the Use synonyms
years
to reach 1.3% and 2.2% respectively. Moving Use synonyms
further
, the average Linking Words
population
growth in Use synonyms
both
locations Use synonyms
shown
a small variation over the period. Wrong verb form
shows
To conclude
,the total Linking Words
population
in Use synonyms
both
Australia and Malaysia grew in the considered time period with the values of 19.6 and 24.3 million.Use synonyms
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