The table below gives information about population in Australia and Malaysia in 1980 and 2002. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The table provides details regarding the different entities related to
population
in two distinct places in the years
1980 and 2002. Overall
, the total population
in both
areas increased over the years
while
there was a reduction in the birth rate.
To begin
with, in Australia, the total male count was constant at 49.9 % in both
years
.Similarly
, the same trend of equal value was seen in the female gender as well. However
, in Malaysia, the percentage of males increased over the period whereas
a reverse trend was evident from
the female Change preposition
in
population
. People over the age of 65 were 9.6% in the former place initially
and inclined up to 12.4% while
the latter place's value was 4.3% in 2002.
It is clear that
the birth rate in both
Australia and Malaysia decreased over the years
to reach 1.3% and 2.2% respectively. Moving further
, the average population
growth in both
locations shown
a small variation over the period. Wrong verb form
shows
To conclude
,the total population
in both
Australia and Malaysia grew in the considered time period with the values of 19.6 and 24.3 million.Submitted by kavitha7797 on
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