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The bar chart below shows the estimated sales of Jeans for two companies next year in Turkey.The pie chart shows the projected market share of the two companies in Jeans at the end of next year.

The bar chart below shows the estimated sales of Jeans for two companies next year in Turkey.The pie chart shows the projected market share of the two companies in Jeans at the end of next year.
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The display bar chart
as well as
pie
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the pie
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 chart describes the estimated sales of
Jeans
 for two companies next year in Turkey and the project market share of the two companies in
Jeans
at the end
 of next year. Estimated sales of
jeans
 next year in Turkey, the data is in thousands of pairs. The mango
company
 and jack & jones
comapany
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company
 in
januray
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january
 it is more than 100 and 450, in
februy
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february
 it is around 100 and 250, in
march
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March
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 it is 120 and 250, in
april
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April
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 it is more than 110 and 300, in
may
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May
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 it is 200 and 350, in
june
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June
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 it is 250 and 400, in
july
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July
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 it is more than 250 and 400, in
augest
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august
 it is 400 and 350, in
september
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September
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 it is around 400 and 600, in
october
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October
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 it is 500 and 600, in
november
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November
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 it is around 500 and 700 and in
december
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December
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 it is 600 and 900. The project market share by mango
company
 is 20%, by jack and jones
comapny
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company
 is 30% and by others is 50%.
To conclude
, the above describe
about
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apply
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the sales of
jeans
 by mango
company
, jack and jones
company
 and by other
company
.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 80%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words jeans, company with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "describes" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
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