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General Training A colleague gave you a book which you used for your presentation. Write a letter to your colleague. In your letter, you should say: •What the presentation was about, •Why the presentation was important, •How did the book help you? You do NOT need to write any addresses. Begin your letter as follows: Dear …………….. , You get 20 minutes to complete this task.

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Dear Mr. Smith, I am writing to express my sincere gratitude for lending me your book over the past two weeks. In fact, your kindness played a crucial role in helping me deliver a successful and professional presentation. As you may know, my speech had been focused on project management constraints, and it was particularly significant as it directly influenced my recent promotion within our department. Owing to the data
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 the book, the presentation was well-received, and I have since been assigned by headquarters to manage our ongoing revamp project—a clear indication of its positive impact. Your book was incredibly helpful in preparing for
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 presentation. Specifically, the three detailed chapters on time, cost, and risk management provided me with the requisite guidance and data to structure the content effectively. Once again, thank you for your generosity and support. I truly appreciate it and look forward to discussing
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 with you soon. Yours sincerely, Abraham Streeter

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Task Achievement
Your letter is well-structured and clearly addresses each point from the prompt. However, you might want to slightly expand on the importance of the presentation to add depth.
Coherence and Cohesion
Consider varying your sentence structure more to enhance the flow. While the letter is coherent, a few more transitional phrases could improve the overall cohesion.
Positive Highlight
Your tone is very appropriate for a professional letter, and the closing remark nicely invites further discussion.
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You effectively articulated how the book aided you in your presentation, demonstrating a clear connection between the resources used and your success.
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