Governments spend millions of dollars each year on their space programmes. Most recently, Mars is the focus of scientists attention. Some people think this money would be better spent on dealing with problems closer to home. Do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own Knowledge or experience.

It can obviously seen that
scientist
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scientists
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are investigating
mars
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Mars
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in
the
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apply
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space
because of to improve
the
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apply
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technology
as well as
environment
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environmental
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problems.
although
, spending
money
on housing to tackle the issue of society
however
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,however
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, searching
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for mars
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mars
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Mars
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from
the
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apply
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space
is crucial to the public.
This
essay will explain clearly why
most
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more
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funding is needed for
space
exploration than solving the problems of home. Authority should spend
money
on
the
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apply
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space
exploration owing to technology could be better
also
it would aid
to
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apply
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the upcoming generation so that individuals will work swiftly
in addition
, global warming is surging to
everyday
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every day
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as a result
it can be
fatal
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a fatal
the fatal
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situation
in
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for
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upcoming
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the upcoming
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generation
hence
, searching
differnt
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different
types of mars where live is present so,
crowd
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the crowd
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may
be migrate
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migrate
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there.
For instance
, In 2023,
indian
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Indian
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scientist
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scientists
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have
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searched a planet where
community
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the community
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can
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could
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stay there till many
sanctuary
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sanctuaries
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that is
greatest
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the greatest
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success for the country.
furthermore
, society are feeling proud
on
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of
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the experts.
Therefore
,
money
should be invested by
lawmaker
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lawmakers
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to make new and
advance
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advanced
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life.
Moreover
, if
technogy
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technology
surpless
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surplus
, people can get a new job .
on the
contrary
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,contrary
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side, if
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the goverment
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goverment
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government
will
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does
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not spend
money
on
the
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apply
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housing so, people face
fatal
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the fatal
a fatal
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situation
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situations
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as a result
they
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the
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housing problem can occur .
In addition
, developing
such
as highways and tolls is necessary to create
efficient
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efficiency
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across
betwwn
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between
cities and suburbs. by building more accessible roads,
transpotation
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transportation
has become safer and less
time consuming
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time-consuming
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. As an illustration, in 2020, since a new
hihway
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highway
between
jakarata
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Jakarata
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and
panipat
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Panipat
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was established, the travel time between the two major cities
have
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has
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decreased from 17 hours to only 7 hours. in
coclusion
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conclusion
, different views on the allocation of the administration budget will
contiue
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continue
to exist.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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