The dangers of smoking are well known, yet many people continue with this habit. What are the causes of this? How can we reduce smoking in society?

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One of the widely common
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found in
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is smoking, even though it is well known for being unhealthy and bad, every third person from five smokes. Everyone has at least four acquaintances or even friends and family members who
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which ruins health and even endangers
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and yet a majority
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people
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smoke
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, but why? The main reason behind
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is an
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to
nicotine
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. When a human starts smoking, he develops an
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to it specifically to
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, a chemical in tobacco and cigarettes.
Nicotine
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produces easily pleasing effects in
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brain,
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, it is only a temporary pleasure,
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, human continues to
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just to feel good again and when they get used to it, it becomes hard for them to quit even if they want to.The effects of smoking are massive,
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habit
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not only eventually destroys your lungs, it
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affects your whole body and can even kill you with heart disease. Smoking causes breathing problems, vision and hearing loss, blood circulation problems and even
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cancer. My bright example of
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occurrence is my mom. She
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for 5
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and even more, even if there were attempts to stop, she still would start once again even if it negatively
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her,
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smoking she already has breathing problems and coughs a lot. She knows she has to quit
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habit
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but she can not
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a
nicotine
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addiction
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, she still tries to quit and
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hope that
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, my mom abandons smoking. The best way to quit
nicotine
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addiction
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is to tackle it with
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time. It is impossible to stop in one day
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because
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is
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used to
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that eventually you will start smoking even more. The second way is to distract yourself,
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you have an urge to
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, think of something else or try a new hobby. Communicate more with
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and ask them to support you in your situation, support and cheer from friends can help a little bit
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because you would not want to disappoint
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and eventually you would not even want to
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anymore
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. In conclusion to everything
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wrote before,
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hope that in the near
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more
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will pick action and quit smoking.
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Personal anecdote used effectively to highlight the issue of smoking addiction.

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