The graph below shows the number of shops that closed and the number of new shops that opened in one country between 2011 and 2018. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the number of shops that closed and the number of new shops that opened in one country between 2011 and 2018.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The Line Chart illustrate
that
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a
varies
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qauntity
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quantity
of opened and closed shops from 2011 to 2018 in a particular nation.
Overall
, the number of
closer
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closers
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is higher than the
openings
except
2011
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in 2011
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and 2015. To commence with, Almost 8500
openings
were recorded where
this
amount by half in the next years. In 2014, the store
openings
increaing
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increasing
back again and reached around 6000. Another downward trend happened in 2015,
on
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an average
4000
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of 4000
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store
openings
.
This
number remained the same for the next three years and
agained
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gained
again
dipped occurred in 2018, reaching down to 3000 shop
openings
.
However
, The trend of closing shops between 2011 and 2014 was inconstant , it started at almost 6000 in 2011, with a slight decrease by the following year.
However
, it peaked at 7000 in 2013 and returned to around 6000 after a year. From 2016 to 2018, the line was stable at
5000
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5,000
establishment
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closed after a significant
dipped
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dip
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in 500 stores in 2015. In conclusion, the quantity of closing shops
is dominating
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whole the period apart from the
year
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years
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of
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2011 and 2015.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words openings with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "dipped" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • retail landscape
  • net growth
  • market dynamics
  • economic indicators
  • fluctuations
  • pivotal
  • consumption patterns
  • e-commerce
  • brick-and-mortar
  • downward/upward trend
  • stabilize
  • recession
  • boom
  • retail sector
  • closure rate
  • inauguration/opening rate
  • consumer market
  • saturate
  • commercial viability
  • profitability
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