The graph below shows the number of shops that closed and the number of new shops that opened in one country between 2011 and 2018. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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that

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varies

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qauntity

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quantity

of opened and closed shops from 2011 to 2018 in a particular nation.

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, the number of

closer

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is higher than the

openings

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except

2011

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and 2015. To commence with, Almost 8500

openings

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were recorded where

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amount by half in the next years. In 2014, the store

openings

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increaing

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increasing

back again and reached around 6000. Another downward trend happened in 2015,

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an average

4000

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of 4000

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store

openings

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number remained the same for the next three years and

agained

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gained

again

dipped occurred in 2018, reaching down to 3000 shop

openings

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, The trend of closing shops between 2011 and 2014 was inconstant , it started at almost 6000 in 2011, with a slight decrease by the following year.

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, it peaked at 7000 in 2013 and returned to around 6000 after a year. From 2016 to 2018, the line was stable at

5000

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5,000

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closed after a significant

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in 500 stores in 2015. In conclusion, the quantity of closing shops

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whole the period apart from the

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2011 and 2015.

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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words openings with synonyms.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.

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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "dipped" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.

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Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

182 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

retail landscape
net growth
market dynamics
economic indicators
fluctuations
pivotal
consumption patterns
e-commerce
brick-and-mortar
downward/upward trend
stabilize
recession
boom
retail sector
closure rate
inauguration/opening rate
consumer market
saturate
commercial viability
profitability

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