The graph below shows the number of shops that closed and the number of new shops that opened in one country between 2011 and 2018. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the number of shops that closed and the number of new shops that opened in one country between 2011 and 2018. 

Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The provided graph illustrates the
number
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of shops that closed and the
number
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of new
stores
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that opened in one nation from 2011 to 2018. The essay describes the main features and compares the features.
Overall
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, it is certain that both the amount of lock and open outlets were decreased during the period.
In contrast
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, the
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of closed
stores
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fluctuated rather than unlock shops. With regards to, closures
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fluctuated so gradually from above 6000 in 2011 to 6500 in 2014.
Then
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, the trajectory decreased dramatically to less than 1000 in 2015. After that, they again increased to above 5000 in 2016. Meanwhile,
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curve remained stable till 2018.
On the other hand
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, the
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of opening
stores
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at above 8000 in 2011
then
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this
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number
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dropped rapidly to 4500 in 2012.
In addition
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, the trajectory of the unlock outlet again rose above 6000 in 2014.
Furthermore
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, the
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of opening shops decreased to 2000 in 2015.
Finally
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,
this
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rate levelled off from 4000 in 2015 to 2017
then
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slightly declined to 3000 in 2018.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 69%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words number, stores with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 5 times.
Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "fluctuated" was used 2 times.
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