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Some people say that the only reason for learning a foreign language is in order to travel to or work in a foreign country. Others say that these are not the only reasons why someone should learn a foreign language. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

In today’s
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 world, learning a foreign
language
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 has become increasingly important. Some
people
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 believe that the main purpose of learning another
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 is to
travel
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 or
work
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 in a foreign country,
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 others argue that there are many other valuable reasons.
This
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 essay will discuss both sides of the argument and explain why I believe
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 learning has a much broader significance. There is no doubt that learning a foreign
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 can greatly benefit
people
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 who plan to
work
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 or
travel
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 abroad.
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, employees who can speak English or another international
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 have more opportunities to
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 in multinational companies.
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, tourists who know the local
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 can communicate more easily, understand cultural differences, and enjoy a smoother
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 experience. From
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 point of view, learning a
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 is mainly a practical skill that helps
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 adapt to new environments.
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, many
people
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 believe that the advantages of
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 learning go far beyond
work
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 and
travel
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.
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, studying another
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 allows
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 to appreciate different cultures and perspectives, which promotes global understanding.
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, learning languages can enhance cognitive abilities
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, some
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 learn languages simply for personal interest, to enjoy foreign literature or films.
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 it is true that
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 and
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 are strong motivations, I personally think the broader benefits of
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 learning are more meaningful. Only a few
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 may use a
language
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 abroad, but everyone can gain mental and cultural growth from the process. In conclusion,
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 learning a
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 helps
people
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work
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 or
travel
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 in foreign countries, its value extends
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. I firmly believe that
language
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 learning plays an essential role in personal development and global connection.

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task-response
The essay fits the task. It gives both views and a view of your own. To be stronger, add one clearer example for each view and state your final view even more clearly at the end.
coherence
Link ideas with small, clear words. Use topic sentences at start of each paragraph to show main idea. Check the flow from one idea to the next.
structure
Plan is easy to follow and has a clear start, middle, and end.
content
Gives travel/work reason and other good reasons.
linguistic
Uses linking words to show order.
Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

Examples make your writing easier to understand by illustrating points more effectively.

Examples, if used properly, not only help you get higher marks for ‘Task Response’ but also for ‘Coherence’.

When giving examples it is best to put them after your main idea or topic sentence. They can be used in the middle of supporting sentences or they can be used to start a new sentence. There is no rule for where exactly to give examples in essays, logically they would come after your main idea/topic sentence or just after a supporting sentence.

Linking words for giving examples:

  • for example
  • for instance
  • to illustrate this
  • to give a clear example
  • such as
  • namely
  • to illustrate
  • take, for example

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • multilingual
  • linguistic proficiency
  • globalized world
  • cross-cultural communication
  • immersive experience
  • adaptability
  • cultural exchange
  • interpersonal skills
  • employment prospects
  • empathy
  • intellectual development
  • overcome language barriers
  • global market
  • resourceful
  • life-changing
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