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The graph below shows the number of overseas visitors to three different areas in a European country between 1987 and 2007

The graph below shows the number of overseas visitors to three different areas in a European country between 1987 and 2007
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The given line chart represents the
number
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 of overseas
tourists
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 to three various places in a European country between the period of 1987 to 2007.
Overall
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, the ratio of overseas
visitors
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 increased from 1987 to 2007.
Moreover
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,
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number
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a number
the number
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 of
tourists
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visited
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visiting
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 the coast was the dominant. The
number
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 of
visitors
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went
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who went
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 to the coast area in Europe was 40
thousand
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 in 1987. The
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visitors
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number of visitors
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 declined and reached
at
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apply
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approximately 37
thousand
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 in 1992. In 2007, the
number
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 of
tourists
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 rose rapidly
at
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to
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 just over 80
thousand
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. In 1987, people from other countries
visited
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who visited
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 the mountains in a European country
was
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were
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 at 20
thousand
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 and
this
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number
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 went
upto
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up to
 just below 40
thousand
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 in 2007. The
overseas
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number of overseas
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visited
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visits
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the
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to the
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 lakes was
at
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apply
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10
thousand
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 in 1987. These
tourists
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 increased gradually and reached
at
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apply
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40
thousand
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 in 1997. In 2002, overseas
visitors
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 visited the lates reached
at
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apply
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the
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a
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 peak
at
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of
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 just over 70
thousand
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 and
then
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this
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number
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 dropped
at
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to
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 50
thousand
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 in 2007.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, tourists, visitors, thousand with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "just over" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • overseas visitors
  • number of
  • areas
  • European country
  • between
  • 1987 and 2000
  • graph
  • introduce
  • overview
  • trends
  • describe
  • analyze
  • compare and contrast
  • summarize
  • main findings
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